WRA-130 Ellie Jensen

I initially noticed the structure of this paper. Every point was clear and concise and the introduction in my perspective was not necessarily engaging but logical and flowed well with organized transitions. Having the first body paragraph as a brief history of food was well done making the second body, American food today, easy to compare and contrast without having to review the text several times. I appreciate the points given in this paper because each accusation is not a single statement but is paired with a form of support, support that could be viewed as common knowledge making it more comprehendible for the reader and giving the reader something to relate to while reading the piece. Something interesting about the piece is I’ve never had to create a paper with the vocabulary subtext; it made the over all appeal of the paper profession and legit.

The topic of American consumption in relation to food is a topic in this day and age as stressed and reoccurring in medical journals, news, television, and multiple forms of media. The topic is relevant and informative which is always a bonus for a paper when you can explain the reason of why this paper exists, why someone should care to read your piece. This paper hits key foundations to an informative paper. Another essential portion of this piece is her explanations of solutions for this epidemic. Entwining current statistics is always engaging to a reader. Having numbers is one of the least argumentative points a person can propose. Supplying simple solutions and realistic propositions makes this paper more then a students paper but something as when I read I took seriously, I felt informed and I walked away learning something about American eating habits.

Overall I thought this paper was done well. My criticism is that some points were pressed upon a bit to frequently bordering on redundancy. But the conclusion was well put together reviewing key statements throughout the piece adequately summarizing the purpose of her text. The works cited was also done well, assuring her reasons do have plausible sources is again reassuring to the reader that this text should be taken seriously in relation to the evidence being given. I enjoyed reading this paper because there seemed to be weight as to why American’s should be reading articles such as this. I was pleased when I finished this paper more so then other text we’ve read so far in this class.